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The Longest Wait (Revised) (Free verse) by Caducus

A plastic tube in oval claret, Your fate lays in a monotone beep. A green line flickers, and hopes rest in uncertain waves, that have become your bedside beacon. I sing your favourite love song, hoping that you'll hear me, sometimes I forget the words, then realize I've just sang them subconsciously. As you flounder in pale shade, I scowl at the vibrant bouquets, that flourish in your decline, as fates cruel hand awaits its Croupier. Fate is a horizontal line, The illuminated split of jade upon black, Time is recorded by impervious staff, Who destroy the remnants of her in sheets, The bed is made for another, And I leave silently to silence.

<~> 5-Aug-03/9:34 PM
but seriously, now. there is more than one way to die, p&k.

"It is not like they just kick you out and bring in a new patient.'
>>they did ask us to leave when my grandmother died. and they did bring in someone new, before we were out of the waiting room.


"Everyone knows that the monitor is long gone in the situation you are talking about"
>>they left the monitor on for grandma. i had to pull the cord to shut it off, because my aunt was pounding it. she could not find the switch. and the flat beep was making her hysterical.

"so most likely the only way you would know someone dead is by the breathing and that is even tough,"
>>it was very tough to tell by the breathing. her last six hours, we thought she was gone, but there was a slow blip.

she had cancers; she had an aneurysm about 6 months into fading, and went in one night. she did wait for my cousin to get there, who had to wait to catch a train from grand central to CT, because she didn't have a car. and then my brother had to go and get the cuz at the station. she went in, spent 15 minutes with grandma, and six months of waiting was over in six hours.

beeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeep...........





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