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My own Truism (Free verse) by Billy Fights

A girl once loved me but I didn't see it I once loved a girl but she didn't care I love another and she loved me But apparently it wasn't ment to be These kinda things make you wonder They bring about all sorts of questions Questions that don't have Answers At least not answers we really want to hear So instead we shout to a deaf God Only to angry for lack of a reply But the truth is that if we got it We'd be scared shitless

http://mulberryfairy 5-Aug-03/9:56 AM
Line 4- "meant" not ment
Line 7- is Answers supposed to be capitalized (doesn't add much, if it is purposeful)
Line 10- I think you mean "too"





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