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Witness to a Murder (Free verse) by poetandknowit

Having your cereal and toast, dealing with morning matters, up hours before me and dawn’s first yawns, when the snap came so fast you could not move your eyes to blink. The scurry ended the back broken, metal pushing eyes and tongue from the face and at that moment nothing stirred in the kitchen not you, my love, who left our warm bed so early, until at last the scream pitched so high as to wake me from other worlds into this one and the realization of what i have become.

Christof 1-Aug-03/2:35 AM
Everyone else has taken issue with this poem, but actually, I think it's the best thing you've written. I didn't read it as a domestic duty thing at all - I quite took it quite literally as your woman witnessing a murder and the shock of it waking you not to the reality of the murder but your own gross iniquity (what have you been up to) - a kind of community of fear and self-loathing. And it's the kind of sudden twist that I, sad sensation freak that I am, really love. Am I absolutely bleeding miles wide of the mark? Am I revealing my own vile and dripping rottenness? Yipe. I am banjaxed by doubt. I may never recover.




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