god'swife31 Jul 2003

Fan fucking tabuless. Some tiny things for flow,like the first parantheticals is that statement neccessary?

with optimistic images of the profane

Hows about- with optimistic profane images

Gray fan oscillating(edit out- at the foot)

You know stuff like that. Nip here nip there. Give it a go. See if you like it more. The last stanza and that switch-a-roo is wonderful writing. You're good.