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Pencil Dust [revised] (Free verse) by SupremeDreamer

The tune of sorrow speaks of tomorrow in a lampshade casting light on a dark empty street. The sign of defeat painted on the feet of a beggar. His brown coat floats over worn boots; the roots of poverty. His footsteps speak a tale of pale bones that lie lonely in the middle of the road. A young fool goads the old man to a duel of words hung on the cords of electricity hanging across the globe. Beneath the old man's robe is a pen, rusty and covered in a layer of dust. The young man's pocket held a pencil stolen from the school repository.

<~> 31-Jul-03/8:14 AM
you pissed me off because you were writing some quality stuff, and you've been hacking your way through the last half-dozen ones you've posted. i thought you were rasing the bar, but it feels like you just got lazy. and nothing pisses me off more than somebody who can do something well that doesn't bother to. what a fucking waste.




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