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Seeing Clearly in the Dark (Free verse) by Jimbo

July 26, 2003 ~ Seeing Clearly in the Dark ~ I catch a movement or two And make the bed for you Seeing faint glimpses In a darkened room Held tightly and without mercy Sometimes under a curdling sky This love so profound A wound again to my body Love like a wild rose briar Occurring in a moment Sudden as snowflakes under a clear sky ~ But tonight the sky is dark The moons leans into another hemisphere Just last night there was twilight and you An evening of love and deep joy But then the morning came And I had kissed you with my eyes Holding you tightly with my breath The overture held me captive Then on that mid-summer night As we had both stood in the garden With two souls standing strong and erect ~ Why is that I wonder That suddenly the sea stirs Causing sea sickness Restlessly and between In water heavy nights . . . was it merely a dream When I wake up in your bed I know I have been dreaming I held you and felt love Then we sang of songs Which we would rather have not ~ Were we better to see in the dark By daylight words would cause wounds Questioning the content of hours before In urgency I begged you to choose your words You are the nucleus of all my space I love you so much can’t you see But somehow I felt swept back As the light collided with walls Hurting and cutting me deep One perfect rose with a scent of dew still wet Today I shared just a glimpse of the night ~ Tlb

-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 31-Jul-03/3:41 AM
Are you trying to suggest that dew is odourless? I'll have you know that dew smells like freshly cut grass and soil, with perhaps the scent of the odd flower thrown in for good measure. The odour is particularly discernable very early in the morning on a day that is about to get very hot. You, Sir, know nothing, and if anything in this world ought to be odourless it's YOU, walrus8.




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