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Infection (Free verse) by nocturnalism

Once upone a poon The yeasty beastys grewn Baking bread was her delight While customers came for fresh loaves in the night No shower Leaves a taste of Sweet an’ sour A douche all problems fixed Until the next ride infectionix

richa 29-Jul-03/9:11 AM
I like the first three lines, kind of nonsense poem come dialect poem.

the fourth line upsets the rhythm though.

Nice to see a heavy metal fan not use politicised and loaded terms and build something out of simple language




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