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Her Sleeping Form (Free verse) by JoyLuck

The darkness of the room clothed her naked form. While the moon, entering through the window above, Traced its finger over her body. An aura of perfume around her neck Led me toward her quiet breaths and My eyes adjusted slowly to the outline of her shape. Gliding like water, my hand swam through her hair Rolling across her bare shoulder, and flowing down to her hips, And underneath the depths of my covers. She stirred from my touch, muttering something, And took my hand into her own. The quiet beat Of her pulse reassured me that she was there. My eyes closed. In love with an emotion and in an affair with my senses, I pulled out the knife and stabbed her. Once into her chest. Twice into the covers. Again and again. Blood was everywhere. Warm drops dripped into my mouth. Her screams were mixed with mine and then his.

LuckyJoe 23-Jul-03/10:10 AM
You set my heart on an ending that would compliment the beginning and that I didn't get. Being mislead or supprised by verse doesn't do anything for me. Had I not set my mind to how I wanted it ended I'm sure it would have been great. Not knocking your work by any means it was still good.
Keep on writing, as a fellow poet I can speak for us all saying we like seeing others ideals to widen our own.




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