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Yellow Star (Free verse) by Mr Pig

Yellow stars in a pit of faces, Staring transfixed from their tomb, At their possessions neatly stacked by ‘perfect mortals’ Suitcases aligned outside the shower room, Emblazoned in names or chalk epitaphs, That stands beside a leather mountain of heels. The drone of a single shaver, Removing the perfect hair, That will be used for textiles to seam more yellow stars, The sick irony of death bearing death, And the whooping cough of a typhoid stricken child, Walking with her mother mild, To the room of no return. In the shower room I sit half a century on, Thinking of the nameless gone, In this room I recall the Mothers, Who would try to help their babies breathe By making them suckle on desperate nipples, Both dying in the shape that they lived in the womb, Where screams turned to smoke that would bellow for hours, I break down in the shower room. I remain haunted by the corrugated corridors, The squeak and lingering echo of recycled boots on shiny floors, Where laughing Nazis would walk to block 11, To purify Jews by liquid suffocation, I see a name carved in to granite, Next to rows of seven stripes until the abrupt end, Continued on to a whole wall, These are horrors I can never comprehend, It leaves me sore, From my one single day in Sobibor.

Mr Pig 22-Jul-03/12:59 AM
You seem to think you know everything and you do not.

I am not a jew. (check mate)
Are you God? did you create me? how the hell do you know what fucking race I am. Its clearly obvious to me after reading your drivel that if you dont know something you simply invent it to massage your intellectual ego. I am nothing like Hitler you are the one labelling wrongly people and resorting to futile playground name calling. As for my Haiku you have actually said gave me positive remarks so saying they are poor now just shows you to be immature, and a jerk. I guess your Poem 'Nigger hole' is accessible to the audience you feel I am alienating? we all do god, bad, exceptional poems from time to time I am no paragon but I do know when someone is taking something way to far like you are. You could do with thinking about what you say before you let rip horus.

Maybe you are a jew because I say you are ! you see its childish to label people isn't it?

Finally this bloody poem was written about the plight of the holocaust not an opportunity for you to advertize your conceited opinions of the poor wronger German common men who 'rightfully' avenged the greedy and i bet you think big nosed jews by torturing them to death and persecuting them.

The Final Solution Horus, you were not born then, neither was I and their are some things we will never know but the facts remain that Hitler and the Aryan race were scumbags so if you feel so strongly why not shave your hair, iron those blue collars and head for your nearest jewish suburb and chant your pathetic defence of history.

I have seen a side of you which truly disappoints and saddens me. All you had too say was 'your poem was bad i never liked it and a basic reason why'

Who do you think you are ?





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