Mr Pig (again)26 Jun 2003

Not bad my boy but one cannot help mourning the use of 'beautiful' , you should only use this word as an introduction or crescendo or else overusing it makes it a tad cliched.

Maybe if I just pull it
against my wrist
without pressing down
the urge will go away

The stanza above is your strongest.

Thank you for obliging me with your effort.

My vote: 6

Good day Sir