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Good Bye (Free verse) by JoeDiamond252

Gristled yellow daiseys crumble stars fade from shine beautiful faces shrink to dust even the mighty sun is murdered by the dark every diamond is just a stone bright nights soon lead to dark days Golden rings drop to the ground all i can really say is you never loved me anyway

god'swife 17-Jun-03/6:54 PM
Rebecca

pressed a steel barrel to my temple
cocked the gun with her fist.

Raped my shine.

Even the mighty sun, someday will
Be murdered
By the dark.

There's your poem kiddo. The rest is trash. Think, boy. I would have given this a three, maybe, but you dropped to new levels at the pitiful end.




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