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Advise (Free verse) by Audaciouslilgrl

In a world filled with hate, There's only so much you can take. You meet people, listen to the comments they make, Then watch, as they make their mistakes. So many people thought they were better then you. When all their friends are gone, whom will they turn to? Your parents are here to teach you, but you never let them reach you. There's a lot they don't know, but they can't let that show. They think if they give you more space, In their footsteps you'll trace. Sometimes that's true, but you've got to learn for you. So my only advice to you: Do what you must do, But watch the world around you. Each day, learn something new. Never be afraid just to be you.

thepinkbunnyofdoom 13-Jun-03/11:07 AM
You really over did it at the end with all the OO ryhmes. I think you should take Rob's Advice and Read some more poetry, cause we see alot of cliche poems here. Its not too bad a poem but maybe next time forget the ryhme and just say what your trying to say.




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