nentwined4 Jun 2003

"a heir" -> "an heir"

You might try getting someone to read this aloud to you, and pick out where the flow seems off. (I stumbled all over the place; nearly broke an 'ankle').

And I'm not all too into the "I must capitalize the first word of every line and put a period at the end". It doesn't "go with the flow" for me. Lots of sentences arbitrarily chopped...