Robert K Foster2 Jun 2003

I've witnessed a few births, and I don't ever remember anything bubbling up. My point is that the poemmmakes it sound like a tremendous fart happened, similar to a big bubble rising in hot mud. BLOOP!
Here's my thinking about your response. You owe reality nothing. just becasue it is the best way to state your perspective of exactly what happened doesn't make it good poetry. I was giving you a reader's response to your poem--and I beleive that if you need to have something "bubble up" there must be a better way of stating it.