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While flipping over stones (Sonnet) by <{Baba^Yaga}>

I found my love under a rock. In the backyard of my mind. With bare feet I'll load then cock. Although I'm shooting blind. It was that reckless attitude. Those chances I would take. I should have shown more gratitude. When they warned me of the snake. 'stead I frolicked mad in rapture. While flipping over stones. A worm was coiled and poised to capture. The rolling of my bones. My head swings low, so sets the sun. Those holes bleed slow, the snake has won.

andrewjthomas 5-May-03/10:35 AM
your content and ryhme are excellent, and your meter over all is iambic, but you miss the "pentameter" part of the english sonnet form
basically every line should have 10 syllables
otherwise, good work!




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