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Fighting erosion (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

We the wranglands that forever be count the country from sea to sea carry the burden seeds from thee. Standing deeply together shields the pretty wind against us wields audible voices much un-heeled. Wastes deposited deep inside a latent type of genocide bark stands tough as winds deride. Sun to soil in knotted grand as the unknowings reach for hand oh forgive, the Orangutans.

Blindproject217 28-Apr-03/10:16 PM
When I read poetry I take 3 steps.
1. I read it over and listen for the overall sound and feeling of the poem. If it makes an enjoyable read the first time without makeing your head hurt then its already decent, which I might add, your poem does.

2. I try and get the deeper meanings of the words and the way they are formed together, such as "Wastes deposited deep inside" I love that line. Im really envious that i didnt think of it first, that is assumeing I have the capacity to create somthing like that, which I do not think at this point in time i have.

3. I read it over again listening to the rythm and recognizing the meanings in each line and seeing the mental picture as i read each one.

Your poem made each read enjoyable. I absolutely love it. Keep up the good work. -10-




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