Ranger27 Apr 2003

I think this version is perfect. The imagery is all there (assuming 'imagery' is a word and not something I've just made up).
Having taken another look, you have one more syllable to play with (I probably sound really pedantic here; I'm sorry because I don't mean to).
Petals fall like torn tears
Dark arid earth is washed
In beautiful blood

Your one is equally good, probably better.

Can I make a request? Do a collection of haikus telling some sort of story, or something like that. You are the three-line master as far as I'm concerned.
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