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Overdose (Lyric) by Miggy

Trying to react as I find myself lost The hangover caused from last night And all the blurry visions fade through my head As inhibitions increase, the effects subside But also my lonesome happiness gone away Finding the way back to that reaction With the nothing I have, still had a tolerance Turning back to complete satisfaction (Chorus) Taking a fall Imbibing to stall Drunk from a reality check Trying to crawl Inhaling it all An overdose of what I least expect Cold all around and couldn’t move It was the hardest phase Illegal to some but not to my pleasure As the eye could only see a dark haze Jaded as all control had left me out Found myself in another risk With something always have been searching for It sketched in memory, need of a catalyst (Chorus) (Bridge) All in motion though my head Couldn’t bear to think about possible death Bloodshot eyes, and what’s only to hear Many voices, screaming in fear (Chorus)

thepinkbunnyofdoom 21-Apr-03/10:26 AM
Whom ever sings this song must be taking it slow or have some really good diction to thier voice. For a song about being hungover I found it to be a little wordy to tell the truth. I really suggest going over it again and maybe doing a 2nd draft. -7-




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