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the photobooth (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

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<~> 8-Apr-03/5:15 PM
okay, the reason i think it has to be clarified is because it isthe first town you mention. but it does not work so well the way you have it now. i prefer the orginal stanza, as the comma'd one doesn't flow. maybe try:

Close your eyes
in London--Ontario's a blurred dream--
and awaken in Toronto
with your cold hands on my belly.




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