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hard as a rock (Villanelle) by <~>

She fell on him like a Mayan maid, With no regard for dignity; And so, her inner self displayed. Her mother, sisters, she betrayed When she, her lust, set finally free: She fell on him like a Mayan maid. In the heat, their bodies swayed. She sacrificed her sanctity And so, her inner self displayed. Other girls would be afraid To partake in such debauchery: She fell on him like a Mayan maid. From her purpose, she had strayed, As, his lunges, she did parry And so, her inner self displayed. The coupling finally made her crazed-- Crazed, and ultimately weary: She fell on him like a Mayan maid And so, her inner self displayed.

<~> 7-Apr-03/6:14 AM
thank you, thank you.
i assure you, the meter stop was intentional. i like to put the breaks on, now and again. i know it fucks with the meter, but it also slows the poem down enough for it to end, tightly.

i have received a lot of criticism about my uneven meter; hell, i've had a lot of rejections with that comment. maybe someday i will decide that they were right and i was wrong. today is not that day.




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