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Shelter (Free verse) by poetandknowit

Twisted trees dance windy rhythms, dead lake below begs for run off, hills to the west capture a storm front. If i stay here longer i will become part mountain, my skin blended from the hunter, movement silenced by the desperate howl of pines battling to know air. Soon snow will again fall.

Caducus 2-Apr-03/5:34 AM
To be fair I liked this, the length is just right for what you have conveyed. line 4/5 is said articulately even though its cliched, and I tip my hat to you on this one and vote you a 9.

(please carry on being a bastard I quite like it now).




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