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Day to Day (Free verse) by thepinkbunnyofdoom

All the white Clouds have turned Gray From the darkest Points comes the Lightning Fully charged With angry Honesty Shouting loud And absolutely Clear Only to be drowned Out by the pouring Rain The troubled waters Fall and surround Us As I stand in the raging storm on What was once a bright and sunny happy Day I have to wonder if It'll ever be sunny Again.

OneFingerAnswer 29-Mar-03/1:02 PM
Line 4: absolutely
Line 7: Seems kind of muddled. Maybe "As I stand in the raging storm on what was once a bright and sunny day"
Line 8: If it's stormy it's not really empty. Maybe "stormy and gray" (Or synonymous words to avoid repetition)

I don't understand some of the words you choose to capitalize. For a title, "Turbulence" ?




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