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last night (Free verse) by nessness

an exhaled "I love you" and a kiss takes me away from this-- the monsters won't come if I'm beside you.

markb 16-Mar-02/1:21 AM
monsters is a charged but generic word that used carelessly is cliche. I'd drop it in favor of something more specific given the short length of the poem.




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