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One Country (Free verse) by poetandknowit

You are standing in Doan's house, built strong to fight the upslope in an alluvial valley west of Fresno, hidden from the desert by fading hills revealing secrets one year at a time. In this place we can meet without discretion, where harvest ended long before these early days of October when darkness does not bend troubling even stars navigating from horizon to horizon, and the wind's new chill still feels thick and fertile blowing past fields barren in bounty. In this dream, I can wrap my arms around you as the woman in a photograph I found on a street some years ago of a place I have never been, although now it is Mendoza or La Rioja, and you are staring away from the camera all the while knowing it is there. In this dream I come as teacher and apprentice to you humming with Gardel's birdsong in the kitchen heat, sweat lights your skin, En unos labios ardiente dejar una promesa hips swaying, arms kneading flat dough for semolas quiero calmar los enojos siempre mintiendo amor and sweet bread bakes in the oven In this place I have bent to my knees, prayed for disappeared mothers and stolen sons, swallowed the dirt of your country, just to feel a part of you.

poetandknowit 24-Mar-03/9:08 AM
Will you go have a cup of tea? You sound utterly foolish. This poem, even in a pure rough draft stage as it is here, is better than anything you could dare write is. In addition, just so you know my dear high school lad, I at one time voted all you poems into the top 15. You and ranger were the champs. I was sick and tired of listening to you both whine. You were giving the British a bad lot. However, I believe dear Z countered my attempts and pushed you back down. Being that I do not have a slew of multiple personas, I could not compete. So there is the voting scandal the like of Piltdown. But that was month ago when I still cared.




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