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Shut Up (Free verse) by openwounds

I removed my tongue last night . Never felt pain, couldn't wait I cut it slowly, taking care . Silence is the only sound I hear My words were killing me . didn't need it really A clean blade soon bathed in blood . falling on the white carpet they just laughed . I saved it . in a jar It's ugly just like the words were . Now I'm pretty

Blindproject217 23-Mar-03/6:59 PM
Who gave this a 10? This sounds like some kind of Manson song, I would have taken it as a plea for help from a tormented child until the last line "Now I'm pretty" it just creeped me out, it appears that years of abuse have pushed you to the edge of sanity, I just can't help thinking of Slipknot or whatever those bands are that sing of self mutilation and depravity. Bands I am sure you idolize and hold in high regard. Wake up. The way you are now is not because some jock beat you up or the pretty girls giggle at you, it is because you let them, the only person to blame for your depression is yourself. The second you let them get to you, the second you give up is where you are to blame. All my life people have told me I?m not good enough, It makes me stronger, that is what I feed off of. The more people say Ill never amount is what pushes me further. Some good advice, no matter how crappy your surroundings become don?t give up, do not let them get to you.




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