Poemranker [Replying] Sat Nov 23 20:57:14 PST 2024

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i'd like to see that that special wrinkle between your brows arched down at the sides i'd like to feel that the sudden inlet of air you gasp when you're overwhelmed i'd like to hear them those filthy phrases you spill online an inch from my ear i'd like to take you to heaven's vices inside my den with walls made of flesh

kthulah

15-Mar-03/11:31 PM

Okay, tell me a word that would be more personal than "special", yet means something similar, and is two syllables with the accent on the first, the first also "short", and the second syllable "longer", and perhaps I'll see your point.

As far as the vulgarity, this is relative, and a matter of your personal moral code, not the quality of the poem.

The rhythm is sound, and it gets the desired message across. If you have a problem with the nature of my vagina not as a flaccid receiver, but as a dynamic part of my body, then you are going to have a great many personal problems with a good deal of my poetry...and none of it will help you as a critic.

So my personal advice for your personal problem is do more Kegel exercises. When you're well on your way in that, talk to some long standing decent courtesans, for the fine tuning (learning to flex the various areas at will, and honing automatic reactions as a sort of reward factor for the man hitting the right spots, as well as how to deal with the "baboon lips" soreness that you'll get once you're very developed, if you haven't had the shaft in a week or two) and then come back and read this poem then.

When your vagina is like a nice place to visit, with spectacular events, you'll understand it...and this is not to brag. It is an easily attainable goal for most women. It's just a matter of practice.

You'll be old fashioned Chinese guy worthy when you can do 1000+ reps in succession.

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