kthulah15 Mar 2003

Well, too much rephrasing and omission would break the rhythm and change the meaning...tilting the balance more towards the emotional and less towards the physical. There's a reason this poem wasn't categorized as freeverse, and there is also a reason that the language is somewhat simple.

The poem was intended to come across exactly as you said...squeezing his penis with my vagina. There are few ways of describing it that wouldn't be too formal to get the message across to one who is somewhat blunt...the inspiration for this poem.

Perhaps you expect too much of poetry. It's not always about lofty subjects. Sometimes it's just about a woman's lust for a man who doesn't mince words. Since he doesn't, I didn't either.