poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on van Gogh's Irises by lastobelus.

Robert K Foster14 Mar 2003

2nd line (in parentheses) is redundant with the title.
also, I suggest cutting "Some kind of" to strengthen the image of forgotten flags--and then ask yourself if the last two lines are truly needed for the meaning of the poem...
a valiant effort...you have a good grasp on imagery and "fresh" language.