<~>11 Mar 2003

Wispy swirling white.
Flashing ruby fright.
Spinning,(ins. comma) sliding away (delete the period)
as more and more (eh. 'more and more' is so generic. you can say it better)
enter the fray.
Many pass(del. 'on) in the night. (what are you trying to say--they ignore someone stranded?)
(delete 'in)Wispy and swirling white.