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Waiting to exit (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

I have grown quite tired of this transparent box I was raised in. I wish i'd seen it sooner. The cold water of knowledge rushes, trying to drown me. Muscles worn numb from swimming. I'm waiting for the water to float me to the top of this box, if I don't expire. Where I can scrape-roll myself over the edge, and fall. On the pavement, I can lie shivering until the blood starts to flow again. Then crane myself to my feet, and shake vigorously, enunciating life. Then wander, to a warm place in the sun. Where I can finish thawing. Then run.

poetandknowit 10-Mar-03/10:52 PM
Some good, some bad. Think about the metaphor you are trying to create and the expound on it. It is not as if it is an easy thing to do. If you want to be a good writer, you have to pour over your work.to make sure everything is connected. Make sure it all makes sense. Just ask DA.




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