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vent tent (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Shelter here now! embracing the displaced feelings you were dealing like rocks your whole life through- Fuck you! I never gave in to whatever was clever or benificial and entirely superficial It's official- you're regrets make you seem like the weakness of my knees in a dreams last disease With ease!- I can squeeze the juices out of this life never looking for soul or strife, only sacrifice in the wake of a path readily taken and forsaken {}"}{}{}{}{{"}{"}{} sanity-equivelant to vanity but there are times when it seems less than a shit riddled dream it's here that fear lingers and tears this place is all too familiar and yet never there but why even express it's insight for those who couldn't or shouldn't care.

THE GOD OF DEATH 5-Mar-03/1:49 AM
Creative use of rhyme... but also maybe a problem? Rhyme can be troublesome when it comes to serious poetry. But I do like your rhymes... creative. You might want to look at the continuity of your explitives. They should be somewhat close in length, but your first one is longer than the others.




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