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For my wife (Free verse) by INTRANSIT

She holds me like a soft summer breeze and kisses me with a doves wing. And when we make love we hold hands and become a placid pool.

Mr Pig 1-Mar-03/5:56 AM
I bet your wife found this simply charming. I would however relinquish the line 'in a soft summer breeze' it serves little purpose without a metaphor. I have just read some of your other work and was impressed but owe it to you to study and pass comment on at my earliest convenience. I wish yourself and your wife many happy years of matrimony.




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