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"Crying" (Free verse) by Jaketiger

Im feeling tired, and lost, Dont know what im do, cause i feel so hurt, The feeling can't be described in just plain words, It like a needle in my heart, i can't help the crying, That why im sitting here trying to let it out, But im afraid that if i do of what youll say. And every day, I feel more distant than i was , and i start cry, My eyes they cant see, and i cant think, but i keep trying, Love is such a painfull thing, for me, Not knowing if you still love me, for me is worse then death. Or is our love thats dieing, Cause if it is i would be lieing , just to stop crying, I love you some much that i feel like dieing, Just to end the pain of this distance between us, But i hold on to tomorrow, for hope that this sorrow, will soon end, but i know that ill love you untill the end.

razorgrin 26-Feb-03/9:55 AM
The use of the language is also important. If you make your language look as if you dictated your work to a retarded 3-year-old, it tends to detract from the overall image no matter how good it is. Yes I am judgemental. All humans/animal in general are, and by saying that you're not, you're simply being a clueless twit.




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