Lord Ganus23 Feb 2003

And what is this profundity through obscurity bullshit anyway, with the titles in, what is that, portuguese? Latin? Both? And writing three of them? Some sort of holy trinity of 'truth'? The repetition I don't like at all here, since it implies a sort of damned for all times type tone where one of discord and sincerity is more suitable.

Are you trying to use the language of old to express something inexpressable in times of old? ie male whore death? Thy? The lines and images themselves are very potent and very well organized but there is so much crap in the way. And the last line is the worst, really, the second to last stands much better on it's own. The finality is far too poetic, to devicey. It acts only as a burden to the obvious virility of the rest of it.