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Stout Stick (Other) by Enki

Paper bag, paper bag, on my head. In the closet, in the closet, lock me in the shed. Manacles, manacles, round my feet. Hit me in the head, that would be real sweet.

Enki 23-Feb-03/3:21 PM
On the first complaint. I've edited the poem so that breaks are more obvious in the way it's meant to be read. So perhaps that will clarify why there is a second "in the closet".
So now the poem has 4 verses instead of two, the first three following the same style the last being different to the other three. Can't comment on your second complaint as you don't explain your gripe with it. The last line is however meant to break with the rest of the poem.




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