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What the runes said (Other) by INTRANSIT

A handfull of sand to the wind, grains showed me the story of friends and to the earth they did recind. I walked along a gravel bed, the many sounds of families took residence within my head. I chose a stone at the waters edge, and felt its story of battering and drowning in the waters cage. A boulder strong cut my finger, So I put my hand to my mouth the salt of the rock did linger. As I approached the cliffs that slept, I smelled the story of their ages and from within their cracks they wept.

x311 11-Feb-03/5:26 AM
A very somber piece. I think it fine except for maybe a couple spots. I don't think you want to use the word boulder in the fourth stanza and also the rhyme between edge and cage just doesn't work. But a pretty decent work nonetheless.




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