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KAT 2 (Free verse) by nentwined

in the darkness I saw a flame and but a moth I flew a merry dance and journey there and by and by were you. questioning your questions and answering as best I could flitting here and there as well wondering what I should. as i pondered how and when you danced away, my flame and I stared from my distance wishing you back again. i yearned and I strived but my wings would not carry my heart - it was heavy my vision was blurry the damsel with the evil eyes a wicked grin forsooth magnesium glare, aura bright burning for the Truth. questing mind, serpent's tongue lies as lithe as please the freest creature I've ever seen pining to be free.

-=SeTTle=- 10-Jul-02/9:23 PM
The irony of this poem is the graphic rigidity of its format. Perhaps you can look into that quality of the poem - the idea that the poetry is in itself a restriction from which you are unable, as a poet, to be free from. And I think the selective capitalization is really a small fish to be frying, I'd focus on the big idea a bit more.




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