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While flipping over stones (Sonnet) by <{Baba^Yaga}>

I found my love under a rock. In the backyard of my mind. With bare feet I'll load then cock. Although I'm shooting blind. It was that reckless attitude. Those chances I would take. I should have shown more gratitude. When they warned me of the snake. 'stead I frolicked mad in rapture. While flipping over stones. A worm was coiled and poised to capture. The rolling of my bones. My head swings low, so sets the sun. Those holes bleed slow, the snake has won.

<~> 6-Feb-03/9:22 AM
2 things:
"With bare feet, and never a sock"
redundant. feels like you were trying too hard.

ending couplet suggestion:
my head swung low, as retreated, the sun
two holes now bled slow: so ended my fun.




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