poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on What the runes said by INTRANSIT.

god'swife3 Feb 2003

A good beginning, tidy up the presentation, for example;

Handful.
recind???
get rid of 'many'(it throws off the rythmn and is quite unnecessary)
did linger? Why not lingered?
water's
Get rid of 'So'
Can something sleep and weep?