poemranker ::Replying

ReplyTo a comment on A Fathers Loss by Lanman427.

poetandknowit12 Jan 2003

Sincerity gets you everything. Cannot not say too much about the craft here, but the sentiment is in the right place. It is just trying to find images to go with it. Maybe try to go back in to the lines and think about what you are saying and maybe try to create and image or a metaphor to convey those feelings. But on it's own, it is sweet at best.