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Morning on Galapados (Free verse) by Mikius

The sun rises Red as fresh blood It cuts the night And calls the day On the mountain The companions Treading snow Travel on As they move off Deep in the snow Thier spirits lift With the dawn The first rays Caress the mountain Like a lover Knowing all the roads And the sunlight pours Like liquid gold Across the slopes Gently kissing the snow The light comes Bright hope Piercing the darkness To bring the dawn

Mikius 9-Jan-03/3:21 PM
Fixed it up now. Thanks for the suggestions. I also added a new verse, so you mean the 3rd to last, not 2nd. Please leave anymore help you can give.




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