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I Retry My Resolve (Free verse) by Nicholas Jones

I retried my resolve By the broken down train - And I could only Shout to the tracks That I am reviled And myself Is divided to the roots. I retried my resolve In streets that are not mine I retried my resolve And found it sabotaged. Therefore I shall distrusted And myself Divided to the dogs. I retry my resolve And find I have none, The routes shall not Be used again And I am divded against all else.

ecargo 4-Jan-03/6:11 PM
Absolutely. That's why I had "a moment" in my first comment. But I think there should still be some sort of context, even in poems that are "snapshots" and "feelings". Your resolve about what? Why'd you fail the first time? See what I mean? It could be done subtly. I'm just sayin'.




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