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Just clubbing fur seals (Free verse) by <{Baba^Yaga}>

She's the rash inside your old suit A chimney clogged with clear soot - The hooded oriflammed Inuit That wished to be more then some burgomaster. She was birthed in a see through igloo But her lips could never just be blue - For she controls your new and improved flue With a hymen dyed hot pink remote device. Now i bet you're thinking, "it's me" While my squire head shoots your palfrey - She's spreading dialectic facts from upstream To escape a life of selling funky isinglass. Behold, your very own gated south pole A well melted and trendy ecumenical - Because you wished to be their next great staple As the saturated produce choked everyone's spine. Just remember this old stuffed shad omen From a drunk and tilting catechumen - The truth is not some miracle vitamin That you can purchase with a free suitcase from the Sears expanded - catalouge..

<~> 3-Jan-03/6:44 AM
h--i liked this very much, but it ain't a villanelle. for a tongue-in-cheek, fill-in-the-blanks look at the pattern of a villanelle, see nentwined's "killer boredom butterfly (esoteric). you gotta repeat and exchange the lines, mon frere. and it's all ababababababab rhyming. mayb baba should wright it? she's got the chops and the name for it.

just go on and change this to free verse, and leave it be. there's a few picayunes, but i'll get back to you on those.

ta.




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