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The Pain (Free verse) by silver

The pain threatens to envelop me And drag me down in its seething mass The chaos swirls around me Where physical meets mental And my soul is torn asunder By the emptiness that is left behind The pain caused by the void Left in my heart The pain caused by my existance The pain that threatens to envelop me And drag me down in its seething mass Without you.

anonymous 9-Jun-01/12:40 AM
nice imagery. it's overall too simplistic for my tastes but could make a decent song. :)




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