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One Country (Free verse) by poetandknowit

You are standing in Doan's house, built strong to fight the upslope in an alluvial valley west of Fresno, hidden from the desert by fading hills revealing secrets one year at a time. In this place we can meet without discretion, where harvest ended long before these early days of October when darkness does not bend troubling even stars navigating from horizon to horizon, and the wind's new chill still feels thick and fertile blowing past fields barren in bounty. In this dream, I can wrap my arms around you as the woman in a photograph I found on a street some years ago of a place I have never been, although now it is Mendoza or La Rioja, and you are staring away from the camera all the while knowing it is there. In this dream I come as teacher and apprentice to you humming with Gardel's birdsong in the kitchen heat, sweat lights your skin, En unos labios ardiente dejar una promesa hips swaying, arms kneading flat dough for semolas quiero calmar los enojos siempre mintiendo amor and sweet bread bakes in the oven In this place I have bent to my knees, prayed for disappeared mothers and stolen sons, swallowed the dirt of your country, just to feel a part of you.

Quarton 29-Dec-02/9:24 PM
Regardless of our differences of opinions, neither
of us have resorted to profanity or personal
attacks on family members as did a previous post.

I did not rate your poem so it was not I who gave
it a three. I will have some comments soon and
did read your piece but not in depth. My first
impression was quite positive and it was obvious
your poem rates much higher than a three.

More later and I apologize for calling you a
hypocrite though we all are to various degrees.

Also, you seem to well versed and I was wondering
if you have an interest in cosmology? The relatively
new world of quantum mechanics is an area I have
pursued for years and I am convinced it is not
written about nearly as much as it should be. I have
written several poems concerning the new physics
and related subjects and my main problem is the
abstract nature inherent to such matters. But, I
keep trying to describe the abstract in a
non-abstract way and believe I have made some
progress though there remains much difficuly
in doing so.




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