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Things (Free verse) by Quarton

Off the assembly line they role, bicycles and washing machines, lawn mowers and airplanes; manufactured in an endless variety of inanimate things. But when did a chicken or steer, a lamb or a hog, become merely an object, an unfeeling and unaware thing? Factory farming, growth hastened to maturity--hormone creativity; unnatural lives confined--defined, from birth to ignoble death. Amidst the mayhem of the cutter's knife, animal cries--bewildered eyes; maximum profit mentality--reality; indifferent to the difference between a lamb and a shovel-- a bleat or a scrape. Newborn calves isolated--violated, destined to die when three months old, throats slit hanging upside down. Unintended mercy--culpability; veal all that remains to justify the pain. Does the tender pink flesh lessen the suffering, do we compliment the chef? Inhumanity served medium rare. Animals possess rights beyond human selection or rejection; though we as a species create misery in denial of shared presence--essence; with impunity and separate from the system we all share. Our common bond trivialized--unrealized as by virtue of no virtue; altruism viewed with open disdain--in vain. While the cruelty continues unabated--unsatiated tho all life related; animals alive and sentient yet demeaned and mistreated, abused and confused, crying out thing--machine.

poetandknowit 28-Dec-02/6:10 PM
Are you in you late teens or early 20s, because you sincerely argue like it, and I do not mean that as a bad thing. The fact that you are concerned about a numerical score on your poem is shallow. Sorry, but any way you look at it, it is rather irrelevant and the fact that you keep going back to it will not exculpate you from the labeling. And the fact that you continue to carry on this discussion in relation to the score and the poem is like beating a dead horse, which your poem would greatly object too. Whether it was penned for the general reader or not does not change the fact that the focus, while benign, still borders on propaganda, which takes away from the images, which are generic. And a calf is also a baby cow is it not. I shall read some of your other work at some time, but at this point the focus is on this poem. If this is an issue you believe in strongly read the books I recommended. I could also list numerous non-fiction exposes that are well researched and quite gripping, but I am sure you have found those at the library or at the local bookseller.




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