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Things (Free verse) by Quarton

Off the assembly line they role, bicycles and washing machines, lawn mowers and airplanes; manufactured in an endless variety of inanimate things. But when did a chicken or steer, a lamb or a hog, become merely an object, an unfeeling and unaware thing? Factory farming, growth hastened to maturity--hormone creativity; unnatural lives confined--defined, from birth to ignoble death. Amidst the mayhem of the cutter's knife, animal cries--bewildered eyes; maximum profit mentality--reality; indifferent to the difference between a lamb and a shovel-- a bleat or a scrape. Newborn calves isolated--violated, destined to die when three months old, throats slit hanging upside down. Unintended mercy--culpability; veal all that remains to justify the pain. Does the tender pink flesh lessen the suffering, do we compliment the chef? Inhumanity served medium rare. Animals possess rights beyond human selection or rejection; though we as a species create misery in denial of shared presence--essence; with impunity and separate from the system we all share. Our common bond trivialized--unrealized as by virtue of no virtue; altruism viewed with open disdain--in vain. While the cruelty continues unabated--unsatiated tho all life related; animals alive and sentient yet demeaned and mistreated, abused and confused, crying out thing--machine.

Quarton 28-Dec-02/6:22 AM
Well, I'm not sure either but I know they are
assembled and by more than one person so call
it whatever you choose. Since you deem my poem
to be without any merit or worth, I am sure there
are other nit-picks you might enlighten me on.

I actually enjoy comments on my poetry, good or
bad. However, to give it a zero is absurd IMO.
Does the book you suggest touch on the animals
intrinsic rights that go beyond human assignment?
Does it speak to the cruelty of raising calves
in tiny pens, never able to run and play as most
young animals do. Does it address the system's
view where all life is related and connected?
Does it speak to growth hormones and the comparative
worth of a veal dinner and the inhumanity involved
in its "production?"

You may say my poem is worthless by giving it a zero
and that is certainly your right to do so. But, anyone
who has read some of the poetry posted throughout the
internet, would quickly realize there is little or no
credibility in assigning mine a zero. In fact, the real zero
lies in your your comments, not mine. Understand it is
not your dislike of my poem that bothers me, it is once
again, the absurdity of your rating which lessens the
credibility of everything that follows.

Have a good day.





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