poetandknowit27 Dec 2002

Cut - i was left standing, by myself. Start with holding hands with air. that communicates that you are alone. The fact that you are reaching (by holding hands) with air creates an image that the narrator was left. So this works. Change stared to staring. Take the reader there with you, make it active. I get confused after that. What are you saying. You mention one moment. They day (or night) of the leaving, then you mention days. What is going on there? What do you want to say?