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First move (Free verse) by aliena

So near, yet so far Pride keeps us wide apart Waiting for the other To make the first move. When you laugh happily I want to laugh with you When you mope silently I want to cheer up you But pride holds me back Making me wait for you To make the first move Side by side we walk On almost parallel tracks So near, yet so far Hurting inside all along Longing to talk but pride Makes us wait for the other To make the first move Against the cry of our heart Our pride keeps us apart So near, yet so far Though easy, it's so hard Someone between me and you Got to make the first move

adrenalize 22-Dec-02/11:31 AM
I like the part bout moving together like parallel tracks...really nice idea




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