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downtown bus (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

snow unfolding in ashen window's reversal, the scourges of campus conspiring, with lurid smiles. cellphones cry like infants, cradled. single thin tones abandoned in the snow, and the U-girls get off at some club, tight glitterbright shirts over shoulders, healthy eeks of recognition and my scarf hides parched lips. now all I see is the relief map on the back of an old man's neck.

New Life Drug 21-Dec-02/4:42 PM
I love downtown buses hehe. I just don't like it when the driver tells you too put your feet down off of the seat or gives you a hard time.. or mentally ill riders. The club part is a good drop-off too. Nice...and the last stanza is a great ending. 9




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